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Hmmm... this is interesting. I wonder how that can happen so often. The 'a' button and the 'i' button are so far from each other. Maybe American keyboards are different.

Some people just don't know how to spell that word. It's a common error, but I don't see why.

It's actually the most common mistake I've ever seen here. The stupidest one too

At least it's read-able.

spiraldoor wrote:

Shawn wrote:Blame Fire Fox for having a faulty spell checking system. BTW, I don't a horses ass if I spell something wrong, so fuck you.

And Fire Fox's spellcheck isn't faulty; "defiantly" is actually a word.

Yeah, I know that was a word btw.

But, let's stop talking about this. If you want to post in this topic, please let it be about the Fan-fic.

I'm going to ask Stacey if she can delete thee messages on this page actually........

At Shawn's request, I have had to delete many of the posts here regarding your arguments about Firefox and Shawn's spelling. I want all of you not to argue any more about this and just let him post his fic in peace.

And Shawn, if Firefox's spellcheck isn't working well for you, have you tried updating it with US English, or how about trying Microsoft Word's spellcheck if you have that? Also, if there are any more posts here I've missed, please PM me the links to the exact posts rather than the page.

OK, thanks Stacey.

OK, until Episode 10 (which is pretty much already complete.) all the episodes are going to be some what short fillers, showing Ferago training Ravior how to use his powers. It’s going to be a little boring. But, bear with me here, I never really had much of a plot with these first few episodes in the first place. So, if you find this episode boring, don’t worry, it will get exciting again in future episodes.

So, seeing how easy it will be to make Episodes 4-9, and Episode 10 is more than halfway done, this will all be over pretty soon, and season 2 will come along. If you’ve already read the crappy original versions, you already know the premise of what’s going to happen once season 2 starts. That’s when this series really kicks off.

So. Sit back, relax, and happy reading. (btw, I suggest you read this one at RZ, just so you don't have to click on links to see the overly sized pictures.)

Episode 3
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The training starts
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Ravior followed Ferago outside of the shelter, and onto a little platform, where he would teach him his first attack.



: So, how exactly are you going to teach me how to use these powers of mine? I thought it would be dangerous to transform into that….thing.

Ferago raised his finger in a wittingly way.

: Not at all! You’re completely safe. Trust me. My quarantine pills never fail. And as for your powers, the data collected from the computer showed all of the things you were capable of, (yeah, just go with it.) and I’ve read through them. You have quite an arsenal, I can tell ya that!

: OK, so, how am I going to transform?

: Just tell your body to.

: ….uh, ok?

Ravior closed his eyes, and kept saying in his mind “Transform me……transform me…….hello? TRANSFORM ME!”

Ravior’s legs quickly felt the urge to jump into the air (I’m just as confused as you are.) leaped into the air, and the transformation process began immediately!

: Ah, there we go.

http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee56 ... /ep3i2.png

: Wow….this feels different.

: It will, but you will get use to it. Now, first, try to fluctuate your hands in an open motion.

: OK.

: GAH! Don’t do it in my direction! Turn around!

: Oh, sorry.

: It’s OK. Now, do it.

: Alright…….

http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee56 ... /ep3i3.png

: Ah, well done. But, you can make it even more powerful. Tighten your knuckles a bit more.

http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee56 ... /ep3i4.png

: Hmm…..that came out looking a little weird.

: Yeah, you’re telling me.

: But, you did well. Try it a couple more times, though. Put more strain into your hands.

: OK…….



: ….awesome.

: That was fantastic! Splendid job, Ravior!

: Thanks!

Well, that was Ravior’s training for the day. Ravior changed back to normal, and he and Ferago went back inside the shelter. They had dinner. …..OK, it was only Apricot Pie, but, still dinner. Ferago could make tons of stuff with his huge kitchen and food supply.

After dinner…….



: That was delicious! I’ve always loved Apricot Pie. For an old guy, you’re really good with food!

: Gee, you’re so kind. But, anyway, you have more training to do in the morning. So you better get to bed.

: Eh, fine. Where am I going to sleep?

: ………



: ……sigh…….I would be better off sleeping on a wet cave floor.

Despite the uncomfortable bed he had to sleep in, Ravior fell asleep relatively quickly. And in the night, his mind was filled with odd things……..


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: …Ravior…….Ravior…….I see you……..hee hee hee………she will die…….and you can’t stop it…….you can’t……..

: Ah!



: ….w-what the hell?!



: ….do I have a fever?

Four hours later…….



: So, how did you sleep?

: I…..(Maybe I should keep that dream to myself…..) I had a nice rest. That bed isn’t too bad once you get use to it.

: Good.

: So, when am I going to start training again?

: Eh, no need to start right away.

: Hum, OK, what do we do in the meantime?

: How about we just talk about random stuff. That’s what I always use to do with my friends.

: Uh, OK…….what do you want to talk about?

: Hmm……how about why your arms are navy blue?

: Oh, it’s a trend. Their called Yigs. Most people wear them nowadays.

: So, are they like sleeves?

: Yeah, I guess.

: Ah…….hmm, you know, we should start training now.

: But I thought you said-

: Eh, forget what I said. Your training is pretty important.

: Um, OK.

To be continued………

So, Episodes 4-10 are all going to be posted in one post. To be honest, I really want to get on with the story, and there really isn’t much to put in eps 4-7 other than some small dialogue and Ravior being trained. So, these episodes all make up for one slightly long ep. Out of eps 4-10, 9 and 10 are the only ones that have anything interesting in it.

Also beware of some crappy story telling. I’m not at my peak of telling stories with text, so……eh, onc’e I get to season 2, it’ll be alright.

P.S. This will be the only time I do this.

Episode 4
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Head Laser
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: Today, you’re going to learn how to shoot the Emerald Laser from your head.

: Emerald Laser, huh. How powerful is it?

: You’ll see once you unleash it. Now, concentrate all your power to your fore head.

: Ok~ay…..



: Good work.

: Hey, what can I say? I’m a good learner.

To be continued………

Episode 5
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A little practice
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A bunch of growling was heard in the distance. Ferago turned around to see that it was more wolves!

: Hey, look over there! Wolves!

: Want me to take care of them?

: Of course! I don’t want to clean up my house again. Besides, this will be good practice.

: But…..I don’t want to kill the wolves……

: I know what you’re thinking, but look: They aren’t real wolves. They’re dark energy that came from the forest’s trees.

: …um……

: Just do it already! They’re getting closer!

Ravior looked at the ground with a solemn face.

: *sigh* fine.

He charged for the wolves, ready to waste ‘em.



: There, that takes care of them.



: (Woah, he’s better than I thought. It didn’t even look like he was trying, and I barely even taught him how to shoot beam……maybe it’s Dark……)

To be continued…….

Episode 6
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How to make a Shield
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: What you are being trained to defeat is very powerful. Having only a good offence isn’t enough. You also need a good defense, and trust me, you’ll be needing it a lot. Not just in this upcoming battle, but in the many other battles you’ll be having in your life. Seeing that you are a Deity child.

: So this means I’ll be meeting the other Deity people some day? Like, will I be living with them?

: Yes. Probably when you’re an adult. I think.

: (Hmm…..at least I’ll have a family of some sort.) Let me ask you this: Are they nice?

: Beats me. I’ve never met them. I don’t even know what they look like. But it’ll be up to you and the others to work together to stop whatever evil that you’re said to one day stop.

: So is our victory a guarantee?

: No. There’s as much of a chance of failing as there is a victory.

: But what about the other stuff that the book said would happen to me and the other Deity people after we destroy the evil? If we fail, what will happen?

: Who knows. Probably something that isn’t good, I can promise you that. But let’s get back on track. To make a shield, focus some power into your arms, then hold them up.

: OK.



: (He’s already perfected it?)…uh, very good.

To be continued……..

Episode 7 (almost there)
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Learning how to fly
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: Probably one of the most important things you’ll have to learn is how to fly. A lot of the enemies you’ll face will most likely have this ability. It’s very easy, you just have to-



: Huh…..well, then can you shoot while flying? It’s not as easy as you might thi-





: (…….maybe I don’t need to train him? He looks to be use to the evil power inside of that body already…..very odd…..)



: (I guess I’m worrying too much. He’s just a strong kid, that’s all.) H-hey, Ravior, that’s enough for today, let’s get back into the house.

: Sure thing!

To be continued……..

Episode 8
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Be careful
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: Well, Ravior, I think your training is done.

: R-really?! Already?! Does that mean I can face…..whatever I’m supposed to fight…now?!

: Hold on a second, Ravior. I must warn you of something first….about Dark’s spirit being inside of you.

: What about it?



: You seem to be getting use to it unnaturally fast.

: How is it unnatural?

: Well…..it’s just that………it’s hard to explain, really…..I guess I’ll warn you about something else then.

: Lay it on me, I’m prepared to take on anything!

: ….after you weaken Dark, the spirit that’s inside of you, he will want to regain control over his power. You will have the ability to give some of it back to him, and that will increase your strength.

: Really?! How?! I should do that!

: No! You can’t let him.

: Huh? Why not?

: In order for him to increase your power, he would have to take a part of your own mind and body, and in doing so, would change your normal physical appearance and some other things about your genetics, be it mental or physical,

: Oh…..

: Although you would gain great strength, it would be dangerous to you. Plus, Dark would have more control over you, and believe me, that’s the last thing you want. Be prepared to be tempted by him. He’ll be asking you if he can increase your power a lot. He may even try to deceive you. Exaggerate things. You know, right? So never, under any circumstance, allow him to increase your power. Meaning whenever he asks, refuse. Got it?

: Uh…sure. I get it.

: ….anyway, now is the time to destroy his control over his power. To do this, you must get him out of your mind, so that you can break the control.

: Before you continue, why can I only destroy his control? Why not kill him completely?

: Because if you completely destroyed him, you would be destroyed too. Besides, it’s probably impossible to completely wipe him out anyway. He’s was un killable when he walked the planet, so now
that he’s a spirit he’s even more invincible, if that makes any sense. But you don’t need to worry about him once you break the control he has over his power. Just make sure you don’t let him have any of it back.

: Alright, gotcha.

: Now, to get a part of him out of your mind, you must use all of your might to unleash him, and it needs to be in an open area, which is where you must go. There’s a place in the forest that’s open enough. Here’s a map, use it to guide you to the spot. Understand?

: Very clearly.

: Also, be careful for whatever attacks you in the forest. I think only wolves are out there, though. It shouldn’t be too hard for you to handle.

: Alright, I understand.

: Oh, and……remember, Ravior, with God, you can do the impossible, see the invisible, break the unbreakable…………and touch the untouchable.

: Um….OK……?

: Good luck out there. May he watch over you.

: …..sure……

To be continued……..

Episode 9
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The Arcane Forest
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: (OK, let’s look at the map……huh…..just one mile north? This won’t take long.)

Area #1
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Arcane Forest
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Arcane Forest theme (listen to while reading): http://www.esnips.com/doc/a41c9a10-57fa ... IntroStage



: Look at that sky……that moon……what serene beauty………*sigh*, I better continue. I’m pretty close to that spot. It should only take a couple more minuets.



: (A cave? I didn’t know there were caves in forests.)



: OK, this must be the spot………alright…….



: GRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!



: …………….



: ……OK……where is he?…….?………!





To be continued………..

Episode 10
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Dark VS. Puppet Dark
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Major Battle #1
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Evil Marionette, Puppet Dark
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Battle theme (listen to while reading): http://www.esnips.com/doc/bfbfef48-ac50 ... -23---Fake



: Gah!



: AAAAAAH!!!!



: …guh…..ugh…..I….have to….get up……before…he…..GAAAAAH!!!!



: ….peh, OK, time to rock!



: What the……I can absorb power into the crystals on my back?…..hehe….



: …..uh-oh.



: ….gig…..this…..feels……AAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!



: (this….isn’t…..escapable…..I’m……done for…….huh? What’s coming over me?…..)



: W-where am I?



: What the?!



: …….mom?

: ………….Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound, That saved a wretch like me....I once was lost but now am found, Was blind, but now, I see. T'was Grace that taught...my heart to fear. And Grace, my fears relieved. How precious did that Grace appear...the hour I first believed. Through many dangers, toils and snares...we have already come. T'was Grace that brought us safe thus far...and Grace will lead us home. The Lord has promised good to me...His word my hope secures. My shield and portion be...as long as life endures. When we've been here ten thousand years...bright shining as the sun. We've no less days to sing God's praise...then when we've first begun……..

: …….Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound, That saved a wretch like me....I once was lost but now am found, Was blind, but now…………I see…….

: …..remember that song, Ravior, it has always pushed me forward whenever I was down. Trust that God will protect you. Trust him, and he will deliver you from your problems, no matter how hopeless it may seem. You can always count on him.

: ……I will……

: …..now, weaken the evil that binds you.

: ……alright. This’ll be for you, mom. and every Rewop that died……

: So long, son……

*FWING*

: Time to finish you!



The evil incarnation then spoke in the youth’s mind……

: Well, well, well……..I underestimated your ability to control my strength. But, don’t feel too proud. That was only a puppet. Luckily for you, though, it was linked to the control I had over the power that was in you, so you now have all the free will to use it. But, if you ever have the desire to become stronger……..let me know.

Ravior lowered his head and smirked.

: Yeah? Good luck trying to convince me into doing that. I know what would become of me if I allowed you to have some of this power back. Ferago gave me the wisdom, and God won’t allow you to harm me.

: Oh, I’m quite certain your faith in God will deteriorate eventually. It usually does with everyone else. Once one thing goes wrong, you’ll blame him, and be angry at him. Will he protect you then?

: …….yes.

: We’ll see about that. Well, anyway, about you allowing me to have some control over my power again……you’ll change your mind on that soon, too. You will have to protect loved ones and yourself in the near future, and allowing me to assist you might be the only way for you to succeed in doing that. It’s your destiny, so I probably don’t have much time to wait until I’ll regain control of my power again. I have foreseen it. The wisdom you now have will be gone for a long period of time, too. Even after you regain it, you will still be having second thoughts.

: What are you talking about?

: …..ah……I can see……the start of your adventure will begin in only a couple of minuets.

: ……again, what are you talking about?!

: You’ll see…..or not…..hehehe….

: OK, you’re not making any sense, so shut up.

: As you wish……oh, and don’t forget you won’t be able to use my power for a couple of hours.
The voice faded away. Dark, the evil Deity, crept away into the deepest part of Ravior’s mind.



: I better get back to Ferago’s place.



: ……..hmm?



: ……what’s that?

In the distance, a giant, purple creature was running towards Ravior, and at a very fast speed.

: I better get out of here!



But before he make much the distance, the monster was well caught up with him.



: ACK!





: …(what is this thing……?)

The creature’s head began to glow. It was going to blast Ravior!



As soon as the waves beamed Ravior’s head even more to the ground, the creature lifted it’s foot, and sent him flying.



In only moments, Ravior went through the thick canopy of trees and into the sky.



He flew miles. For forty three minuets, he was shooting through the clouds at a very fast speed. Of course, Ravior was unconscious. He was almost on the different side of the planet when he finally began to fall to the ground.



IAD part 1, end.

To be continued……….

Can't wait til the next chapter

It's almost done, but I haven't done much with it in the past week. Been taking a break. Ep 11 is really long.

You look great today.