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Hello, I am doing a project about my comic!
I want to know what do you think of my comic.

The Comic:

This is about a team of heroes from different worlds that left their tipical lives, due to a more important mission:

"Save the universe" from what, you say Ha , I cannot tell you. You will see when you read:

Mixer Slayers: crossover/Action/Horror/Romance (?!!)
(PG-13)



PAGES:

http://fc04.deviantart.com/fs21/f/2007/ ... lina14.jpg
http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs15/f/2007/ ... lina14.jpg
http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs15/f/2007/ ... lina14.jpg

UPDATE!!!: http://fc04.deviantart.com/fs18/f/2007/ ... lina14.jpg

Wow, awesome job! I cannot wait to see more! Please update when you draw more.

Welcome to PC I hope you'll enjoy yourself here. By the way, keep drawing!

Haha, the Angry Beavers are thinking "WTF, we are heroes? YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS I/WE OWNZ" LOL they are my favorite ah childhood memories, I look forward to more of you comic!

bst comic eva plus orsum chars equals keep workin ur the bst thx

Good art

Keep it up

Nice!

But I need to say something:
1. First of all the art is great, you draw well.
2. The problem is with the story is the introdution, "Hy, we are a group, you're awesome, join us". That's actually boring, and has no sense. They are just together becouse they're awesome or what? What are they directives? Do they have a mission? I think you should include some excitement in the story, and some logic, maybe an unexpected fight, a monster gets into Junipers world, and the Heroes follow them, and then they meet whit Juniper who shows her great abilities, for defeating the monster. That's just an example, you don't need to follow this. But I think you should change the first pages.
3. The worldballoons, actually there's two-three wellknown rules for the world ballons, first of all you can't use tow or three different style worldballoons for one character, It must be just round, or square, except if they shout, becouse then you can use special wordballons here. Secound. You can't change the size of the letters, you should stick with one. Becouse if you change it every time it looks chaotic. Third. The words should not touch the brinks of the wordballoons. You shod keep a distance between the words and the brink, try to adjust the sentences in the middle of the wordballon.

So the art is awesome the story is undistinguished, but I see some possibility.

thanks for the tips, i'm going to change the worldballons
but hey wait! don't flame my story at all, it starts boring but then the excitement goes, you know juniper don't have idea of what's goin' on and then her grandma explains everything, plus rayman and the gang had another mission (a first one, that im going to explain on a special) so the second one is whit a new member -juniper.

But whatever, thanks yeah i'm going to make some changes for the next pages ,
you know is hard to work alone

Over a year later...

Could you do some more please?

D please don't bump topics by people that aren't active anymore.

The guy has left anyway, it only requires a smidgen of common sense to realise that no updates will be made..

*looks at MLIIs' sig*

Xenon, you utter genius. Now there is one less PC member and one more depressed kid in the world. Great job. Congratulations.

Umm.

I doubt that she left because of my comment, but if she did then it's really not my problem. If she feels that insulted over one single message then there's nothing I, nor anyone else can do.

Rayman_Addict41 wrote:*looks at MLIIs' sig*

Xenon, you utter genius. Now there is one less PC member and one more depressed kid in the world. Great job. Congratulations.

Mylifeisinsane left, but came back as Rayman_Addict41, so what's wrong? If you can't understand constructive criticism, then you'd better leave for good, especially if it leads you to show no respect at all for the moderating team.

I would say "Good riddance", but that would be harsh. If there was a milder version of "Good riddance", I'd be using it now.

Interesting that they are both one of the same, especially since both accounts are also used at the RZ.

Anyway, how pathetic.

I knew this RaymanAddict person was you MLLI. Why did you make an alternate account?

Well I know the creater of this comic didn't stay because she wasn't that good at english, and didn't know much to talk about, so that ends your argument, My LIFE IS INSANE IN DA MEMBRANE. ;3

StaceyW wrote:I knew this RaymanAddict person was you MLLI. Why did you make an alternate account?

She wanted to go out with a bang.

neo wrote:Well I know the creater of this comic didn't stay because she wasn't that good at english, and didn't know much to talk about, so that ends your argument, My LIFE IS INSANE IN DA MEMBRANE. ;3

INSANE IN DA BRAIN!