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Unspoken

Posted: Sun May 11, 2008 9:42 pm
by Zay-el
Well, here I am with yet another flick. This is rather short compared to the others, but I hope you'll find it equal in quality. 83

Before the fic though, something important: I'm taking request! Yep, since I'm still taking a break from PTD, but since I can't afford to be lazy about writing, I am prepared to do a few requests, if anyone is interested. ^_^ Only one condition: no OCs, except if you can give me COMPLETE details of him/her. ;)

Done with the talk, here's the story 83

Unspoken

'Today...'

The morning sun lavishly brightened her cozy little home, announcing the dawn of the day she'd been waiting for. Just as the first glimmer shone onto her closed eyelids, she woke up at once. She hastily strolled through her house, freshening herself for the day ahead, humming a happy little melody that seemed to have been made just for this day. Normally, she was ready with her morning preparations in just a couple of minutes, but today was a special day...she wanted to give her best. If all would go well, this day could very well mean her entire future!

'Today I'll finally do it...'

Her sisters always said the first day of the summer-season was special...they never openly explained why, only giving her quite suggestive looks. Not that she cared much about it though...today would be unique, in one way or another. She calmly combed her hair in the mirror, setting her blue hair into it's desired position, getting rid of every curl and needless twist. She gently brushed it over her pointy ears, though careful not to cover them...she was proud of them, not finding any reason to be ashamed over them.

'Today I'll muster the bravery...'

Finished with applying the jade lipstick she'd been using for the past few years now, she decided to play around a tiny bit, before moving on. She blew a kiss at the mirror, giving it her sweetest look, from which even the lifeless glass would have melted if it had any emotions. Blushing a bit, dug her fingers into her bushy tail, combing it in a simple fashion. One could easily tell by all this initial precaution that she was planning something big.

'No more excuses...'

She inspected herself one last time, looking for any kind of imperfections she could cure before leaving. Nothing...her body suit was freshly cleaned, her face shining with the innocent virtue of youth, her eyes glimmering with anticipation. Though she could hardly wait to go already, she wanted to be just simply perfect for this day.

'No more delays...'

Giggling a tiny bit as she found everything perfect for now, she strolled out of her bathroom, nearly skipping already in happiness, unbearably excited about today. She couldn't wait to be out in the open, heading with blinding speed to the one she wanted to see most...the one she prepared this much for. Despite how worried she was the night before, now she was full of hope, full of optimism...full of that warm feeling she adored to have and wished to keep forever.

'Today is the day...'

She took a deep breath, mustering every ounce of bravery she had collected overnight. She'd need all of it now. Heading towards the door, her head was already clouded with ideas and thoughts about how she would confront him, telling him about everything she harbored for him, saying those little words that could very well change their relationship forever.

'Today I-'

A wave of confusion and surprise washed over her as she noticed a letter on the floor before her door, obviously slid in through the crack. 'I didn't expect any letters...' She leaned down and picked up the little envelope, inspecting it. Her stomach twisted in knots as she recognized the curlicue writing she knew only one person had. She opened the envelope with a trembling hand, not knowing what to expect.

Opening the small letter inside, she began to read it. Her suspicions were confirmed immediately from the addressing. 'Dear Ly,' he had written, always playing with decorating the 'L' in her name, making her shake her head with a smile. It was a tad childish custom, but she certainly wasn't one to ruin his little fun.

As she began to read the true content of the letter, so did her mood darken, her expression slowly but surely twisting from happy to shocked, from shocked to annoyed, from annoyed to angry, and from angry to furious. The words barely even set in her mind by the end, all of it flowing together into a disgusting mass of ink.

'I know you wanted to talk to me...' She scowled deeply, clawing slightly into the silky paper. '...been invited by the Musician...just for two or three weeks...' Segments of the letter kept echoing in her head, as if he was right before her and telling her these. '...just wanted to let you know...promise I'll listen when I get back...take care...' Her teeth were showing for the anger by the time she read the letter the second time, a flame burning in her jade eyes, burning off the signature. '...your friend, Ray.'

A bang echoed in her house as she kicked into the door, trying to vent off her anger and frustration. 'That...idiot, he truly isn't aware of anything! How can he be this dense? Didn't he expect this to come sooner or later?' She found the door to be sufficient and let herself loose, pounding it with both hands, grasping the letter in one of them.

'Stupid...wretched...idiot...' She addressed him as anything bad he could imagine, though that didn't ease the ache in her heart. 'You can't be this apathetic, can you? Haven't you noticed at all?' She felt tears beginning to spill from her eyes, running down her rosy cheeks. They silently fell on the floor, molding into the wood, only tiny darker patches remaining.

'Are you really this blind?' Bitter feelings charred her innards, bringing even more tears to her eyes. She had already stopped pounding the door, her usually smooth little knuckles covered in bruises. 'You, who saved the entire world, how can you be so oblivious?' Anger still pulsed in her but she no longer attempted to vent it on anything, not having the stamina to continue. She grasped into her own hair from the frustration, ruffling up her combed locks. A scream of fury begged release, but she denied it.

'It would have been as simple as opening your eyes to see...that every time you laugh, I laugh along with you, my cheeks growing red...every time you tease me, I do the same, often resulting in a brawl between us...' Reliving the thoughts didn't help the gaping hole in her heart, caused by the lancet of his words. 'Every time you smile, I go weak in the knees...and every night when we look upon the sky and you're next to me...I see the twin moons as us...'

The sounds of sobbing, floor creaking, paper rustling all echoed around the house before everything came to a sudden halt. Time no longer seemed to exist, the once cheerful tone of the home sunken into a den of sorrow and hurt, poisoning the air. 'I was ready to give my heart to you...to offer my very soul, my deepest existence...'

A sound finally broke the eerie silence, bringing a moment of cacophony along with it. The sharp sound was like an explosion, merciless and unforgiving. Even the birds nestling around her window flew away hastily, as though there was some great evil at work here, instead of the warm-hearted being who frolicked around, a sweet smile ever-present on her face.

Words shattered apart, lines became blurry, sentences bundled up from the torment the letter was enduring. It soon lost all sense, the information stored in it becoming less understandable by the moment. Scribbles and shards rained down from her hands, while she still worked on annihilating whatever remained of the letter that brought her nothing but foulness. '...but you didn't even give me the chance. You just shrugged it off like it was a piece of dirt...'

'I should have known better...I can act in any way, you have a spirit that cannot be tamed by neither mortal or immortal powers.' She moved onto the final part of her onslaught, destroying the name she savored so many times...the name she cherished and nurtured in her heart, only to throw it out and stepping onto it now. It no longer meant more to her than just a couple of letters.

'Don't worry...I respect your choice. You're proud of your freedom, only caring about things you want to care about, ignoring everything else.' The last few shreds of the letter slowly glided down to the ground, joining the rest of the mess. 'So don't be afraid...I won't even try to restrain you anymore...you're free.'

She slowly turned from the door, no longer wishing for this day's light to touch her skin. She wanted none of that. A moment of thought was all she allowed herself, before going off into the back of her house, still having things to attend to. '...and I hope you'll suffocate from all that freedom.'

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Sun May 11, 2008 10:18 pm
by Limely
Wow. Just... wow.
Man, do I know those feelings. Everything. From the beginning, when she's getting dressed and stashed up for a special someone, trough the middle, where anger consumes her, and until the end, when she lets go, wishing he'll sort of die in a hole. It's like you've described the wrath I felt in a certain situation I'd rather not think too much about.
Beautiful, well-written and it hits the spot. I love it. You really convey how poisonous we girls can become in certain situation, no matter how sweet we usually are.

Oooh, requests huh? D: Well, I feel that the world would become a better place if there was more fics revolving around Murfy-face. 8D
No pressure, though. I'd hate you to write something you don't really feel like writing.

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Sun May 11, 2008 11:01 pm
by Zay-el
I didn't really work on experiences here, the idea just sprung into my head and I thought she'd react like this. I'm happy to see I managed to get it this right. 83 In any case, if I can guess reactions and feelings this well, I'll hopefully managed to avoid causing them. XD

Murfy, eh? 8D I don't really write about Murfy that much since I always fear I'd mess up with him for some reason...I might give it a shot though. I need the practice. :D Any particular idea or shall I invent something on my own? ^^

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 12:08 am
by Limely
Good thinking. x3 Feelings like those are awful. D:

Ideas... I don't know. But it'd be awesome-sauce if you sort of dived a little deeper into his head than what is usually done. Sarcastic assholes tend to hide some sore feelings deeper down.
If you do write something like that, I'd totally do some illustrations for it. xD
Once more, I'd hate you to write something you don't want to write, so only if you really want to. :3

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 12:15 am
by Neshae
Nice story. I've been there myself.

As for requests, I wouldn't mind seeing someone other than Dreyfus and Catmeister write about Neshae for a change. Though if me requesting my own fan character sounds kind of cliche then Rayman babysitting for Globox sounds kind of funny. XD

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 8:12 am
by Holy Crap
nice work. and nice idea there neshae :lol: babysitting 600 kids can't be easy :shock: and about your other idea, i don't think i'd mind reading another story about neshae, he's one of the coolest fancharacters i know of. :)

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 1:17 pm
by Zay-el
Limely wrote:Good thinking. x3 Feelings like those are awful. D:

Ideas... I don't know. But it'd be awesome-sauce if you sort of dived a little deeper into his head than what is usually done. Sarcastic assholes tend to hide some sore feelings deeper down.
If you do write something like that, I'd totally do some illustrations for it. xD
Once more, I'd hate you to write something you don't want to write, so only if you really want to. :3
A fine idea, though I already have coursing in my head. 83 From what I see in my mind's eye, it'll be quite short, but would be kind of funny XD And don't worry, all I need is a starting spark in my head, and you'll have to tear me off the keyboard with a crowbar. :D
Neshae wrote:Nice story. I've been there myself.

As for requests, I wouldn't mind seeing someone other than Dreyfus and Catmeister write about Neshae for a change. Though if me requesting my own fan character sounds kind of cliche then Rayman babysitting for Globox sounds kind of funny. XD
Thank you! ^_^ I'm not sure I'll try Neshae since I haven't started reading your stories yet so I don't know much about him. :oops2: BUT, your other idea made me laugh even by thinking of it! I'll most certainly try that idea out! XD
Holy Crap wrote:nice work. and nice idea there neshae :lol: babysitting 600 kids can't be easy :shock: and about your other idea, i don't think i'd mind reading another story about neshae, he's one of the coolest fancharacters i know of. :)
Thank you 83 Do you happen to have any requests? I can do virtually anything, from fluffy to gorey, just ring the bell and tell me what you need. ;)

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 1:29 pm
by Limely
Awesome-sauce. :3
No matter what you write, I'm 100% positive I'll enjoy it anyways. : D

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 1:38 pm
by Zay-el
I already LOVE the idea in my head...and since it's a short one, I think I'll get it done by Sunday, hopefully. ^^ All I can say is, Murfy will be facing up against his greatest rival! D8

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 1:42 pm
by Limely
Sweet. 83 I'm excited already.

Lul, what could that be? The manual? xD

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 1:56 pm
by Zay-el
XD Nope, but I'll make sure to include it in the story, at least with a quote. I mean...a talking manual, that just CAN'T be ignored! 8D His greatest rival is much closer than one would expect. X3

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 2:10 pm
by Limely
Spoil no more! I'm looking forward to it. :0 It'll be supah-awesome.

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 2:25 pm
by Zay-el
XD What can I say, I like to tease my readers. X3 But I'll stop for now. You'll see it with your own eyes soon enough. 83

And my offer still stands everyone!! I'm taking all of your requests until I collapse under the weight XD

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Tue May 13, 2008 4:30 am
by Holy Crap
yay for sunday!

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Fri Aug 01, 2008 10:04 pm
by spiraldoor
I gave a request(on the RZ version of this thread, that is)...

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 3:42 pm
by Zay-el
spiraldoor wrote:I gave a request(on the RZ version of this thread, that is)...
Sorry for not noticing it for so long, and that I'm replying here(I trust PC more than RZ). So...I hope you don't take it badly if I say no to your request for the moment. I still have about...4-5 that need to be done at some point, and lately I haven't been able to write as well as I usually could(meaning I'm in the middle of a writer's block. XP). I might eventually do your request at some time, but don't count on it, especially not in the near future.

I hope you're not mad though. 83

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 3:49 pm
by spiraldoor
That's okay. I'm actually thinking of writing a fic of my own, but it will most likely be years before I have the time or skill to write it -__-

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 3:52 pm
by Zay-el
Of time, I have no idea. BUT, of skill, that can develop extremely fast. Compare the first chapter of PtD to one of my newer oneshots. ;) Believe it or not, I improved to that point in just a single year. I've written something about every 3-4 weeks or so, yet I developed to the point where I am now. 83 So, all I can say about that is just write and you'll get better faster than you know it. ^^

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Posted: Thu Jan 08, 2009 6:36 pm
by MLII
Oh my god...Wow. Wow. Oh my god...
You do realize I am not a naturally speechless person, but...Wow.
:shock:

Re: Unspoken

Posted: Thu Jan 08, 2009 6:40 pm
by Zay-el
Looks like I'm making an impression on you. XD I'm happy you liked it. ^_^