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Hi, everybody!
Tonight, I had like a sudden desire of writing a fanfic for the first time.

I finally finished it (phew!): I basically wrote something about the teensies (as there aren't many stories about those...)
I let you check this out if you wanna read: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8595925

As strange as it seems, I prefered to start it in English, as a challenge for myself, so you may see some eventual mistakes around...

I just hope it's not too bad...

It's quite nice, it's like a casually humanised version of the teensies, I like it. There are quite a few English mistakes overall, but correcting them specifically I don't think won't do a whole lot. One thing I do want to point out though, in the first line, you wrote "come one," I think you meant "come on."

RayFan9876 wrote:It's quite nice, it's like a casually humanised version of the teensies, I like it. There are quite a few English mistakes overall, but correcting them specifically I don't think won't do a whole lot. One thing I do want to point out though, in the first line, you wrote "come one," I think you meant "come on."

Haha, yeah I noticed it but didn't know how to correct the few mistakes I could already figure out. x)

Well, I just did it like 30sec ago anyway: I thank you for your remark. It's nice.

To be honest, I was a bit tired when I made this chapter, so probably wrote clumsily. :X

Woah nice job Sama...
I want to know more things about Teensies' society. However avoid too many caricatures about human society if you can (the narrative could suffer a lot from that). Keep on going !

saerleiya wrote:Woah nice job Sama...
I want to know more things about Teensies' society. However avoid too many caricatures about human society if you can (the narrative could suffer a lot from that). Keep on going !

Hahaha, don't worry, humans are only secondary characters, who appear at times... In this chapter we more or less understand why the teensies have a human way to act (seriously: they walk, they dress up, they talk with words (their original language... but I added that with time they also learnt the typical language of the country used by humans as well... yeah, they are bilingual or even polyglot), they have a kind of hierarchy etc.) and then adopted their cultures according to the place where they live (yeah, 'cause despite this mondialisation process, there is still the fact that the culture is not the same all over the world).

But the story is based on the teensies' universe. (Thank you for your advice by the way... I will consider it).

I think that with a lazy and clumsy ass like this main character, the adventure starts well. x) Hahaha.

Thanks for your support, saer. [/i]

Samathou wrote:
PS: I think of translating it in French as a separate fanfic if I find the time.

I could do it if you want (but not before the next weekend because i'm fucking overbooked too).

saerleiya wrote:

Samathou wrote:
PS: I think of translating it in French as a separate fanfic if I find the time.

I could do it if you want (but not before the next weekend because i'm fucking overbooked too).

I'm already doing it, actually, but I thank you for helping me: I'll see about your proposal.