All right, here's <'s poem about "The Mountain Fortress", as the poem's named:
There was a huge, beautiful fortress mined from a mountain that stood grand among the forms of the land. Deep within the ancient fort stood huge statues of metal, wrought; of dwarven kings and mythical things with teeth and talons forged in gold, and fairytale creatures of old. Great carvings telling stories and myths in pictures and ancient glyphs of the woes and foes of the mountain people covered the walls of the halls and rooms filled with tombs like rows of teeth biting from beneath.
I stood in an entrance dug into the mountainside and looked across the landscape, wide, to see in the dark of the night the beautiful sight of a star, shining bright through the light of the moon and the shadow of the crowds of clouds that hung high covering the sky.
A chilling breeze brushed my face as the warmth of the work and toil and the boiling of water working the mechanisms moving molten metal in pots of stone could be felt bellowing against my back.
At my feet the snow basked in the glow from behind and the frost on the nearby plants' tops melted into drops that rolled off their leaves and fell to the ground with a pattering sound. Fur clad creatures, small and tall, bounded over ice cold brooks into nooks and burrows, over wagon-cut furrows into gaps under stones and homes in thick woods over bogs teaming with toads and frogs.
Off to the west the land lay abreast of the sea, as dark as can be. The waves that crashed against the caves formed a mist that coated much of the earth beneath from the woods to the heath that surrounded the tallest mountain, and only it's peak could puncture the bleak blanket of fog above.
And there I'd end my break for the sake of the workers, mining and melting metals, hunting and preparing food and drinks to be brewed, and I'd join them again as a member of the mountain fortress.
Very atmospheric. < really likes how you've spaced out the flow, speaking it aloud the rhythm is intuitive. The shape is less intuitive, but < guesses that was an aesthetic choice?
Jewish Candy wrote:Very atmospheric. < really likes how you've spaced out the flow, speaking it aloud the rhythm is intuitive. The shape is less intuitive, but < guesses that was an aesthetic choice?
There wasn't really much to it, the whole thing was imagined up on the spot and there wasn't much going back and editing, other than for the story's continuity's sake.
It was originally just < writing something about a dream < had in a cavern in a mountain once, and < expanded on it and made it rhyme in parts and just went with it without regard for any particular structure or shape.
<'s glad you liked it though
< read that it's coming out 29th may in europe.
< is still unsure about the retail price, because Amazon says 70€ preorder and other smaller sellers charge 40€ and some for little less than that.
< got back in to Gravity Falls and < is going to read a fan fic in some minutes
< is pretty embarassed to tell what < is reading though.
Also, < got reminded of Jewish Candy because of Wendy, and now < knows, they're both "redheads"