Fanfic: A new dawn

[K.NARREN]

"why....."
"because! your always being such a wuss.@
"but isn't breaking in illegal?"
the tiny ting stared at his new friend. the blue ting grabbed at the door.
he paused, as a oily smile that would've carmed the birds off the tree creeped on to his face. he then produed an enourmous set of choppers[teeth, and they're his own] and proceeded to bite at the lock. the ting was shocked. he'd never seen such big teeth. he clambered over, and together, they opened the door.
"not so hard, is it wuss?" the blue ting smiled, and walked through the door. the ting stared, and noticed that....no, no-one could be watching them. he went through the door.

"it's beautiful, isn't it?" ly stared at the wide plain. reflux put his arm reassuringly on her shoulder. she was right, the land was clear, and brighter than ever. globox was going manic.
"i guess it's even better with pablo out of the way, eh rayman?" rayman smiled. recently, he had had to defeat several villains including strongoli and even a metal moskito. believing it was razorbeards doing, but it was in fact his other nemesis, pablo. while there had been a victory, pablo had died at the feet of his daughter, now in the care of her mother mariak. rayman powerd up his fist, and broke open a barrel of plum juice.
"not for you globox" reflux held globox back and pinned him down. the scenery looked promising...until the rocket crashed.

i hope you all enjoy it!

[Hunchman801]

Well, it's really short and characters appear like mushrooms...

[K.NARREN]

whoops! i forgot to put in the chapter one at the begginning.
oh, and do you mean by mushrooms that the characters are a bit soft? well, in my other fanfics, the idea was that reflux was framed by andre and mr dark, and he got angry at rayman because rayman "stole his honour". of course, if he killed rayman, then there would be no hounor in that, so he became good. the story will get more lively as it goes along, i promise.

[Hunchman801]

Then just post the whole story

[Guest]

gee....i forgot about that. well, i guess i prefer to leave readers waiting for the next chapter so that they want to find out more. okay, here's chapter 2.....

holgrump staggered out of the spaceship. he was hungry. he was cold. he wanted to see his phsyciatrist. but he'd done it, he'd landed on an uncharted planet. maybe they were friendly. he ponderd for a while. a smile came across his face. maybe they'd have pie! he waited as 4 figures came towards him. 3 of them, he noticed, were wierd looking. they had arms, and while one had no legs, his feet were attached firmly to his body. but one looked just like him- no arms, no legs or neck, and the same kind of neckerchief.....he smiled and ran towards them.
"pie?" they stared at him? the warrior one picked him up by the head and began talking to his friends in a strange language. but the limbless one...he had the same accent. back on his planet, everyone had that kind of accent, even thier queen, betilla. funnily enough, the female reminded him of betilla. he began to twiddle his ....
The gang stared at this newcomer. it was globox who spoke up.
" he....he...he looks like you, rayman?" rayman stared. the creature was trying not to look at him. but when globox mentioned rayman, the creature looked up. "rayman?" the creture began to talk rapidly, but no-one could understand him.
"wait" said rayman. a teensie king had given him a translator so as to understand the speak of the cruleans. he activated it. "okay, lets start from the begginning. you know me?" the creature nodded.
"but of course, you're rayman, the saviour of our planet! you were gone forever!" he gesured towards his ship, "come, come, we must talk, i'll tell you everything......"

"i saved your planet?" rayman was transfixed. the creature, who they had found out was called holgrump, sipped his plum juice.
"yes, that's right, don't you remember?" he pointed at globox,"you hit it off quite well with globox, but the both of you were taken by the pirates. after you left, the land fell into despair, thanks to a struggle between mr dark and the pirates. in the end, they both left to come to this new planet. don't you remember?" rayman struggled to remember.
"i remember the pirates and mr dark, but the rest........" he then had a thought. "why did you come?" holgrump sighed. "i came...to tell you...that your father is ."

[K.NARREN]

hey, i just got kicked out! sorry about that, i wondered why the screen kept flashing.

[th3()ne]

THAT IS SO AWSOME!

[K.NARREN]

thx! okay, here's the next part.....

"my father is what? what were you going to say? i didn't even have a father? what......" holgrump hung his head. he began his story....

many yaears ago, when you were knee high to a grasshopper, your awsome father tried to destroy mr dark. you see, mr dark had tried to introduce tings of his own kind into the universe, but theese were'nt the kind we know and love. these monsters tore the grand high puzzle of the tings, which was divided between space mama, mr stone, the leviathon skops, and mosqiuto who later betrayed his master to join you, though i doubt you'd remember. you didn't recognise him buzzing around in the forest clearing on this planet. anyway, when mr dark showed his true colours, your father and mr magic helped seal his fate, which you tried to defeat, once again. then things got out of hand, with the pirates and evryone else after you'd saved the planet. razorbeard threatened skops, who still has the final piece of the puzzle, which he converted into a wand, to drive unwanted guests away....

holgrump stopped, and rayman sighed. he couldn't remember anything. he turned to holgrump.
"and my father....." holgrump looked up.
"still on the prison ship. when you lost your memory, you met globox. but then, the both of you were captured and taken to the prison ship. globox came from another planet, but i guess he didn't tell you, which meant that you assumed this was your home...." he turned to globox, who shrunk back miserably. "i was only trying to make friends, and i was going to tell him anyway..." he mumbled. holgrump continued..."but your father also was captured, rayman. he's still on board that prison ship, only this time, there's no-one to help him. the whole ship is abandoned, and only his son can save him." holgrump stood up to his full height, which wasn't very tall." only you can do it rayman, and i'm going with you."

until next time!

[th3()ne]

That part wasnt so good

[K.NARREN]

ahh, the fun hasn't even started yet! also, i added the bit with mosquito because you see him in rayman 2 but you don't talk to him.

so, next time, expect some reflux action, ly wizardry, teesie bashing and of course, plum juice drinking.

[TalibanReunited]

That was nice, may the gods bless you my friend.

[K.NARREN]

what, the fanfic or something else? oh, and thx!

[TalibanReunited]

indeed

[K.NARREN]

Reflux flexed his claws. this was going to be a long journey. he'd never left his home planet before. the teensies were stuffing themselves into the rocket. reflux gave them a hand. he sighed and took one last look around....it would all be gone. he hoped that this new planet would be better. he remembered the harsh times he'd suffered as a kid. before gumsi, the pirates had captured the knarren and taken them to the prison ship. when they escaped, the child incarnation of leptys's son had appeared: gumsi. reflux wandered what the otherers were feeling as he picked up his leptys staff.

ly smiled. a chance to see a new species of fairy like herself. ly began to meditate. she'd still miss the old place. all her friends...gone...not that she had many. although her servants worshipped her, they were a bit too fond of themselves and were snobbish. the fairy council did all the work, she just protected the planet. they had once rebelled involving 200 casulties {bumps on the head] and several mops, all of which were magnatised thanks to lys spell. still, she'd be with reflux, and the rest of the gang. she wondered how the others felt.

globox stuffed 6 enorous barrels of plumjuice in the back of the spaceship when no-one was looking. he hoped that there would be plums on this new planet. and pie. and plums. and cats. donkeys! the possibilities seemed endless to globox. he would get to meet rayman! oh wait, he already...what was the question again? did he pass? then it began to sink in. he had been to this planet once before, but this time, he'd be leaving uglette and 300 children behind. he was nervous. he looked to the others for insparation....pie......

"well?" asked holgrump to rayman,"is that everyone and everything?"
rayman looked around."i guess so...." he checked. holgrump checked that the doors were locked, and he reved up the engine. the rocket burbled, juddered, and shot into the sky. the planet seemed to get smaller from the window. rayman turned to the others. suddenly, globox farted, wet himself, and screamed.

[#Rubber mark#]

Am I supposed to read that?

[neo]

Sorry, #RubberMArk# doesn't know how to read, he's illiterate. (That means he's lazy, and doesn't want to read long posts, lol)

Nice Fanfic, keep up the good work.

[K.NARREN]

thanks! btw, it's time for that reflux bashing action i told you about!

a huge jelly, perhaps the size of the empire state, cruised towards the intrepid hero. globox shook holgrump.
"YOU NEVER SAID ANYTHING ABOUT FLYING JELLIES! WHAT KIND OF SICK PERSON MADE THIS! WE'RE ALL GONNA DIE!" holgrump freed himself from globox's grip, sat down and began to spray an air-freshner.
"you see, mr dark was a very....demented wierdo. to stop enemys from coming to the planet, he created a giant jelly, which is now defenceless." rayman raised an eyebrow.
"who wrote this anyway?" they all stared at k.narren, who thought this was a good time for the gang to land on the rayplanet.
the gang stared at the green meadows, the blue skys, and the clear water.
"the fairys really look after the place" said ly, looking a little jealously at the landscape. then again, she was usually up to her neck in legal orders and zombie chickens, both of which were hard to get rid of. holgrump wasn't smiling. "guys, you really think this place is still a picture perfect scene. take a look over there. looking to thier right, a whole load of green men were getting ready to pound them. livingstones, thought rayman, and reflux held them back. "this," he told them, "is going to be fun."

the livingstones didn't know what hit 'em. several of them went flying into the air, another pairs skulls were ed together, while one was bound to a tree by the magic in reflux's staff. this continued until all of the livingstones were down. reflux smiled, when a huge booming voice came from overhead.
"stop!" high on a hill, a creature that looked like a hoodlum, but had a blue head with two yellow eyes which wern't the same as each other, a yellow sowed up mouth, and blue sleeves on a green body. "i am scout, leader of scout patrol. and who, may i ask, are you!"

[th3()ne]

talibanreunited told me to ask you, would you like to join the clan, he said you are worthy.

[K.NARREN]

join the clan?..........cooool!

[K.NARREN]

sorry, pressed the post button twice.