Haha, the Angry Beavers are thinking "WTF, we are heroes? YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS I/WE OWNZ" LOL they are my favorite ah childhood memories, I look forward to more of you comic!
But I need to say something:
1. First of all the art is great, you draw well.
2. The problem is with the story is the introdution, "Hy, we are a group, you're awesome, join us". That's actually boring, and has no sense. They are just together becouse they're awesome or what? What are they directives? Do they have a mission? I think you should include some excitement in the story, and some logic, maybe an unexpected fight, a monster gets into Junipers world, and the Heroes follow them, and then they meet whit Juniper who shows her great abilities, for defeating the monster. That's just an example, you don't need to follow this. But I think you should change the first pages.
3. The worldballoons, actually there's two-three wellknown rules for the world ballons, first of all you can't use tow or three different style worldballoons for one character, It must be just round, or square, except if they shout, becouse then you can use special wordballons here. Secound. You can't change the size of the letters, you should stick with one. Becouse if you change it every time it looks chaotic. Third. The words should not touch the brinks of the wordballoons. You shod keep a distance between the words and the brink, try to adjust the sentences in the middle of the wordballon.
So the art is awesome the story is undistinguished, but I see some possibility.
thanks for the tips, i'm going to change the worldballons
but hey wait! don't flame my story at all, it starts boring but then the excitement goes, you know juniper don't have idea of what's goin' on and then her grandma explains everything, plus rayman and the gang had another mission (a first one, that im going to explain on a special) so the second one is whit a new member -juniper.
But whatever, thanks yeah i'm going to make some changes for the next pages ,
you know is hard to work alone
I doubt that she left because of my comment, but if she did then it's really not my problem. If she feels that insulted over one single message then there's nothing I, nor anyone else can do.
Xenon, you utter genius. Now there is one less PC member and one more depressed kid in the world. Great job. Congratulations.
Mylifeisinsane left, but came back as Rayman_Addict41, so what's wrong? If you can't understand constructive criticism, then you'd better leave for good, especially if it leads you to show no respect at all for the moderating team.
Well I know the creater of this comic didn't stay because she wasn't that good at english, and didn't know much to talk about, so that ends your argument, My LIFE IS INSANE IN DA MEMBRANE. ;3
neo wrote:Well I know the creater of this comic didn't stay because she wasn't that good at english, and didn't know much to talk about, so that ends your argument, My LIFE IS INSANE IN DA MEMBRANE. ;3
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I hope you'll enjoy yourself here. By the way, keep drawing!
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