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A practice fan-fic

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Please leave some good replies to this!
Didn't think of a title. :P

'WHAT!? shouted Rayman at the meeting.
'For the last time, Rayman...' answered a Grand Minimus. The door was thrown open by Murfy, who was late.
'Hey, guys! What's up?' laughed Murfy.
We are here for an important discussion. spoke Ly, telepathically.
'Ah, don't do that to me!' shouted Murfy.
The Four Masks of Polokus have been stolen by Mr. Dark. If we do not act soon, the world will be destroyed.
'Mr. Duck? Who's Mr. Duck?' asked Murfy.
'No time to explain,' hurried Rayman, as he rushed out of the door.
'STOP!' yelled a voice from behind him. Rayman turned around and found Globox asking to come along on the journey.
'You can come too, Globox,' said Rayman. He started to the door again, but another voice said 'STOP!'
Rayman turned around, slapping his forehead. It was Clark.
'I think you should take the fairy-man,' said Clark, in his primitive voice.
Nutter, Rayman thought.
'We shall protect the Heart, while I inform my brethren, the Griskins, to go and meet you at The Land of the Livivd Dead. They will accompany on your adventure. Now go, before we are all doomed!' yelled the Grand Minimus.
Be careful, Rayman.
As the heroes fled the building, Murfy looked around him.
'Hey, Rayman! Wait for me!' he shouted as he scrambled out of the building.
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Re: A practice fan-fic

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Umm, since nobody's giving feedback, I think I should warn you that the plotline gets a little confusing in the middle.
Reflux HAS been killed, yes, so has Andre but now he's back to life.

The party trekked through a cave that they thought was just a little bit damp. They passed an old broom and ducked under a platform whose eyes followed them. Just then, a neon light lit up the tunnel.
'Hello and welcome to Eat at Joe's!' said a strange alien. 'What can I serve you today?'
'Hello again, Joe,' replied Rayman. 'We've come to ask you a favour.'
'Rayman? You're looking well! What is this favour?' asked Joe.
'Mr. Dark has stolen Polokus's Four Masks. We need to recruit you for some extra help,' answered Rayman.
'It's a deal! Anything for my finest customers!' laughed Joe, as he shook Rayman's hand. They ran off to their next rendezvous, The Land of the Livid Dead.
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KOOLIO >_>
What's it called?
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I'm so sorry this took so long, I haven't thought of a name for it yet.
I almost finished this bit when suddenly the computer shut itself down. I lost all my work. :pascontent:

'What took you so long?' asked the Griskins.
'Hey, at least we remembered!' moaned Murfy.
'Rayman! My friends told me about your dilemma. We are honoured to help you again.' They floated down to Romeo's office. Rayman eyed the doorway.
'I think I have an idea on where to go next...' he spoke.
He entered the office and jumped into the glowing orb, but was surprised to see Romeo operating on a Gorilla Pirate.
Upon seeing Rayman, the Gorilla Pirate immediately collapsed from shock.
'Uh, robots can breath, right?' asked Romeo. 'Hey! I know you! You're the dude that, like, totally took down that Black Lum!'
'Yeah, we're going on an adventure and we need a doctor.' said Globox.
'Can it wait? I'm, like, totally in the middle of an operation.'
He stared at the horrible facial expression on the dead Gorilla Pirate's face. An eye was popped out of his socket. The body was twisted and mangled.
Romeo pulled off an arm and whacked the eyeball with it-golf style. It landed into an invisible hole. He put the arm in his pocket for safekeeping.
'Sure! I'll help you on your adventure-wherever you're going.'
Rayman thought back to the meeting. Something was boring into his brain.
'Bring the fairy-man.' Clark had said.
Who was the fairy-man?
Was it Ly? No, she's female.
Murfy? Nah, he wasn't a fairy.
He racked his brains. Suddenly, he knew.
He told everyone to stay put, except for Murfy.
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Son of a biscuit! That dead Pirate will provide trouble later on...

'Pheeyew!' complained Murfy. 'This place stinks! Who did you say we were looking for again?'
Rayman didn't answer. He hopped over some lily pads as he called something out. He knew nothing could hear him in this place.
He called again.
And heard a response.
The response was getting louder. Murfy had gotten bored of waiting and started dipping his toe in the murky, green, water.
As the response was at it's loudest, it was suddenly drowned out by a large, shark-like being jumping up from the swamp.
Murfy screamed in horror and flew behind a tree.
Behind Eig was Sssssam.
'Hi, Rayman!' said the ferryman.
'Could you take me to The Land of the Livid Dead? I might need you on an adventure. You see, Mr. Dark, my arch-nemesis, stole all of the Masks of Polokus.' said Rayman.
'Sure! Happy to help you again.' replied Sssssam.
As Rayman shot onto Sssssam's scarf, Murfy came out from behind a tree, sucking his thumb and looking slightly yellow.
'Hey, Rayman! Wait up!'
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I was about to continue it, when I realised it wasn't the PC movie >:

Nah, just joking. You do good ^^
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Thanks!

'Come on, guys! Ride the Funkyboard!'
'We can't,' muttered a Griskin. 'We have been confined to this land by our spirit, Palmito. If Polokus is in trouble, then the only one who can contact him is the Leptys.'
Murfy picked Rayman up and flew him to the Desert of the Knaaren. He was about to fly away when a cold hand grabbed his neck. 'Where do you think you're going?' said a voice. The hand turned around so Murfy could see Rayman's face. 'You're my ride home.'
Rayman's face turned from joy to terror as another hand felt his back.
Gumsi was behind him. 'Hi Gumsi, we want to let the Leptys know if the Griskins can go free from the Land of the Livid Dead.
'I'll ask Reflux's second-hand man.' replied Gumsi.

Reflux had no second-hand man.
Gumsi found him.
'What's going on out there?' Reflux whispered to gumsi in ancient Knaaren.
'Rayman is back.'
'Rayman? That runt?'
'He wants the Leptys to answer a question.'
Gumsi told Reflux the question, then went to the statue of Leptys.
'Almighty Leptys, can you ask Palmito if the Griskins can leave the Land of the Livid Dead?'
A minute later, Reflux said 'YES.' in a gruff voice.
Gumsi waddled out of the cave and told Rayman the good news.
Murfy flew off with Rayman.
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Coolio ^^
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The gang will FAIL now. EPTICALLY.

Once out of the Desert, Rayman told the ghosts that Palmito could let them go. Then they hopped into the glowing orb, which is where the eyeball was.
Rayman rode on the Funkyboard.
Sssssam could follow them to the Desert, but there was no water, so the nearest place was the Summit Beyond the clouds.
The Griskins flew.
Murfy flew.
Joe was being carried by the Griskins.
Romeo flew in on the helicopter.
Globox was being carried by the helicopter.
Everything was going smoothly, until Rayman hit the eye and fell off. Romeo was the first to notice.
'Hang on, frog-dude! Rayman just had a major bummer!' He flew down to try and get him back.
Globox's screaming got Murfy's attention, so flew down as well.
And when Murfy went, the Griskins piloted Joe down before plunging into the whirling colours to the crash site.
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Noes TT_TT They failed eptically.
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