RayFan9876 wrote:
Easy. Raygirl finds his body after he dies and breeds.
This... vaguely disturbed me. LOL.
Rayfan9876 wrote:Wait... no. I don't know. Lol.
But the dialog won't cheese, I'll make sure it gets what it needs.
Although I don't want it to be too smart or the kids won't understand it, and it'll just sound like the writer is boasting about her vocabulary. I'm not "really good" at writing realistic sounding dialog, so I'll have someone else, I think the person on the last page before this said she was good with writing... I don't know how to spell her name, do that for me.
Aw, you're considering it? Yay!
And... by the way, don't take it personally. I'm really picking about writing, especially with grammar and spelling, and I find fluent dialogue to be important as well. I kinda get that way with anyone's writing; I usually keep it to myself to avoid sounding snobby or arrogant, but I guess I figured that since you're taking this project pretty seriously, you might want to ensure that the writing is on par with the rest of the game's quality. I'm no professional - I always consider myself to be learning more and more as time passes, and I have a dreadful habit of writing sentences that are far too long - but I'd like to think I'm somewhat decent at writing stuff. =) If you want I can write up an example of something based on a prompt you give me, or if you don't want to bother with that I've got some writing in my dA gallery too. I don't want to make myself out as an 'amazing writer' or whatever without having anything to back me up, so whether the quality of my writing is something you'd want is really up to you.
Hah... my screen name IS a bitch to spell sometimes, ain't it? I get a lot more people who don't know how to pronounce it though... and honestly, I don't blame them. It's a weird one that was conjured in my twelve-year-old mind and was resolute in using when I was 13 and old enough to join internet communities. XD At this point I just keep using the name to be consistent. If it makes it easier, you can just call me Feb instead. =P
In all honesty, the idea of Rayman and Raygirl having sex/a kid is something that my brain doesn't want to accept. XD The moment with the kid is really sweet, but there's nothing wrong with Raygirl being just a friend either. If a character that's the 'last of their kind' suddenly meets another 'of their kind' who happens to be the opposite gender, it's almost guaranteed in most fiction that they'll fall in love and have kids. Understandable(Freud, as was above mentioned), but all the same it's just been used so much and...
Bah. Whatever. It's your story. XD I guess it just kind of came outta nowhere and hit me in the face when I was just getting used to the idea of Raygirl being in it. I'm going to give a little reminder that I have a pretty big opinion on this being published and made Rayman canon, but instead of going off on that I'm just going to say this: Somehow, I'm not sure Rayman having a kid or having a fan-made love interest would sit well with the folks at Ubi.
And... er... uh. I honestly doubt that this will ever become an official game(nothing personal!), but I'm largely a skeptic at heart with these kinds of things, and hey... you never know, I might be surprised.
Don't let me stop your ambition; whatever the case, this looks to be a fun project and whatever the outcome on publishing is I'm sure lots of people will enjoy playing it, especially since it wouldn't cost them money to try out... you know people and free things.
(And copyright issues. But that's another story)
On another note... whoa, Rayfan-who's-making-the-story-here! You're only 14?! Geez, you know more about making a game than I do and I'm two years older than that! XD 3D programs confuse me... although it probably doesn't help that the only one I've attempted with in the past(besides one environment thingy I had when I was a kid called Bryce 5 or somethin') was Blender, and that was freakishly complicated and confusing. Haven't even
tried the Mac version... not sure if it'd fare much better.
I think I'm gonna stick with 2D drawing or messing around with clay, hehe. As cool as 3D modeling is(and it's like... REALLY cool, with all the things you can do with it; games, movies, hack models, etc), I think it's something that will forever remain out of my understanding.
Not my thing, I guess. Too tedious and patience-requiring.
I figured your concoction was vaguely family-friendly. 
The flying off into the sunset without Rayman bit is especially good, methinks... As long as the dialogue doesn't descend into cheese, it'll reek of epic. I look forward to a revised 'standard' ending, too.
I'm sure she has a good reason. 
Yeah, the more contribution from the community, the more sauce, so that's a good idea.
Surreal.
As if you couldn't have noticed before.
